Needs more work

The overall concept, plot, and ideas behind this book are pretty fascinating. And I was pretty excited to see how things went in book 2. However, this one was a bit of a miss for me. I think the author should spend some time improving their writing style and skills. I say that because I am invested in the series and pretty curious where it goes from here.

* Not enough leaving the library. Even mundane adventures is probably better than sitting in the library all day.
* Not enough interesting characters
* Cook for instance, is a robot. In the first Starwars film, all the characters were robots until Lucas' wife edited the source material to actually be interesting; turning the characters into actual people (at least, that's what a Youtube video said). Where I'm going with this, is that relational development with a robot does not interest me. Dotty the chair would be a fine exception to this.
* More visual depictions would be nice.
* Characters use a lot of the same words or phrases, and sometimes the story writing itself repeats some phrases a tad often.
* The writing style itself seems quite primitive to me. I don't really know how to word this. The author needs to find their voice and tell the story in a more direct manner.

I think the library could be compared with hogwarts in concept. A vast mysterious, magical academy, where many strange and wondrous things take place. The cooks and cleaners at hogwarts is quite interesting, iirc hundreds of elves or whatever. 1 robot named cook is relatively uninspired. Perhaps opening the food wing as the climax of the story wasn't a great plot point because it may have held the story back.

And then the really only interesting dialogue is with the elf king and his son. Which I think leaves us with an interesting question, 'how do you make characters interesting that really add nothing to the storyline?'

I think the assistant that repairs books is an interesting character. But we also need to add colour and soul to the other assistants too.

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