Greatest Eric Vall Series so far!

My favourite Eric Vall series so far! Love the new narrators too. Alex and Marissa keep up the great work!

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I wish I was the Alchemist, erm, Doctor.

Absolutely a blast, it made me wish I was making Monster Girls! Love It beyond compare! I am excited for the next in this series! Time to go check it out!

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Great voice acting but meh story

Edit: revisited this a year after to check if my review of it would change. Nope. Still a weak story and good performance but just as cringe.

I liked the voice acting and to be honest the world setting seems pretty interesting too but actions of the MC seem to have little consequences. By this I mean it seems like the author had a story in mind when writing but instead of letting it flow naturally to the world setting he decided to force the world to fit his story.

For example, the first girl the MC makes automatically loves him, and by love I mean fanatical obsessive love. All because he happened to have a drop of his blood be included in the creation on top of luckily having a cat jump in there AND there was mix up of prisoners meant to be used in the experiments that ended up being a woman(a super rare prisoner according to the MC in this world I might add) AND he just HAD to use her in the experiment or he would be executed (this last one seemed possible but only barely).

The first creation was 99% luck and 1% "science". The only way he would have been luckier would be if God itself reached down from the heavens and did the whole thing for him. (Which debatably did happen)

In general, the whole thing is one giant Deus EX Machina story where everything just works out for the Mc with little to no consequences.

Even with all that I might have been able to overlook it if the catgirl actually acted more suitable to the situation in the beginning (hostile, confused, scared, you know normal emotions when you literally just popped into existence a second ago) and not like a loyal love slave bound to him by blood. Maybe then the MC would have to try and win her over and not just have plot armor thick enough to make Thanos his b*tch just by walking in the room.

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Wasted Potential

If suspension of disbelief comes easily for you and all you're looking for is adult scenes with girls that have animal ears, a tail, and maybe weird colored skin tied together with just enough plot to keep you interested, I still wouldn't recommend this book, but you'll find what you're looking for and I won't judge you if you like it. I read the first 5 books before my annoyances got the best of me. The performance by the VAs both Alex Perone and Marissa Parness were excellent and I probably wouldn't have gotten as far as I did were it not for them.

A word of warning though: if homophobia offends you, if you want characters that are defined by things other than their love for the main character, if you want a harem where the girls actually have some diversity in personality and body type, or if you want monster girls that are actually monstrous, do not read this book. Read Celistine Chronicles by Cebelius instead. That book has a great performance from Tess Irondale and it addresses all of the problems with Making Monster Girls listed above and below. Unlike this book, Cellistine Chronicles is written well enough that if you stripped away the adult stuff you'd still be left with the skeleton of a really quite decent fantasy/isekai series with really likeable characters.

With that out of the way, I have so many problems with this book it's difficult to know where to begin. Having dropped this series indefinitely, my overall impression is that this was a cool concept let down by horrible writing and laziness. This was the first monster girl/harem book I tried reading and it frustrated me to no end.

Everything about this book feels lazy and half baked. It feels more like a mediocre fan fiction to me than anything else. The setting, A pre-industrial society in which Woman hold all the power, has potential. The problem is that the author didn't spend nearly enough time considering how different aspects of it interact with each other. Despite having electricity, pocket watches, and even elevators, the characters still use flintlock pistols. The prose is atrocious. Characters never seem to talk in circles, repeating themselves and anyone else multiple times in the same chapter. Words are used incorrectly so often I wonder if this has ever had a proof reader.

The setting and characters, including the protagonists, are also unjustifiably homophobic. Homophobia would be bad enough on its own, but it completely contradicts the setting the author has created. The book's society is defined by its hatred of men, In a world where even giving birth to a male is stigmatized, I would think that you would end up with something like what ancient Greece had but in reverse; Woman love other woman and men are for procreation only. But no, every named character, including the characters we're supposed to like, are disgusted by the idea of two woman in love.

You'd think given that this is a harem book that the woman in the harem would come in all shapes and sizes. Indeed, our hero Charles Rayburn claims that they do, nearly every single one of them is some shade of white and blonde, they all have giant tits, wide hips, and a waist so narrow Charle's could "wrap his fingers around it and have them meet in the middle." Except for one girl who is white, has brown hair, big tits, wide hips, a waist so narrow you could wrap your hands around it, and she's also short.

Even worse, every single monster girl inherently loves Charles as a result of being a monster girl. Every single character, monster girl or not, is defined solely by their relationship to Charles. Characters don't grow or change either. None of the relationships are earned and there is no conflict between the main characters whatsoever.

And then there's the protagonist. Charles Rayburn. He claims to be a crusader for Men everywhere, but at the start of the book he admits to killing hundreds in his experiments. They were prisoners, but Charles knows the justice system is broken and many of them were likely innocent. There are a few points in the book where he kills men with very little remorse. Even more annoying for me though is the fact that every single character in the book gushes about what a genius Charles but nothing in the story convinced me of that.

If you like this series, I'm not going to judge you too harshly. My libido and the melodrama of Charles Rayburn narrowly escaping death at the hands of yet another scheming Woman kept me reading till book 5. But this just isn't a good book in any sense of the word and I can't in good conscience recommend it to anyone. The prose is clunky and repetitious, the setting is underdeveloped and constantly in conflict with itself, the characters are boring and one dimensional, the women are basically pallet swaps of each other, and the fact that it's homophobic in a way that contradicts the single most important aspect of the book's setting is kind of just the cherry on top.

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